문법을 맞춰보려고 하는데 제가 어떻게 판단할수 있지않아서 오유분들께 여쭤볼까합니다 ㅠㅠ

 

My figure after 10 years

I am working operating room nurse at Hanyang University Hospital in 10years

Nursing University graduates are finding it difficult to get jobs with Hanyang University Hospital

During the work, I want to have a Bachelor's degree from Hanyang University

If I get the chance, i will think about getting my Master's degree and Doctor's degree

Currently, Having good TOEIC grade is best way to get a job

So, I study hard to get a good score

I was heard, It is important that you study your english diligently every day. So i study English for two hours everyday

As a result, My TOEIC sore came up 100points in recent test

Frankly, I was exhausted by english but I shall try my best to be sucessful

Not along ago, I lucked out and go th language traing

So I', going to the philippines for a short language traing course

Upon this opportunity, My TOEIC grade will become 700 after 3 months

Until the end of 2014, I will be Toeic score of 800points

10 years from now, I have plans to buy a car

I want to buy a Germany's Volkswagen golf

Because golf is a fuel-effient and good design

I will contract marriage with one's future wife and I will give birth to a baby girl in 10years

My future family of three people, including me, will be a good family

지금도 부모님을 존경하고 감사해 하지만 10년후에는 경제적인 여유로인해 부모님을 해외여행을 자주 보내드릴계획입니다.

2학기 동안 최선을 다해 수업르 해주신 교수니께 깊은 감사하고 제 글을 읽어 주셔서 감사합니다.

 

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밑에 두문장은 제가 영작을 못하겠더라구요 그래서 능력자 님들께 부탁을 드려볼까 하는데 조금 도와주시면 감사하겠습니다.ㅠㅠ